Summary of the second journal

Until then, the climate change seems to be a hard problem for all the nation leaders in the world, but the development on bio-technology recently has opened a new path.
It is mainly about making use of the natural ecosystem and the biodiversity. The journal also deals with the two reasons for human to maintain and promote the natural ecosystem. The first one is its important role in the flight against the climate change, such as how many gigatonne the ocean and the forest can help to store and isolate carbon per year, how many lives and money have been saved from threaten disasters by some kinds of plants like mangroves or wetlands. Second is about its economical characters, compared with using other hi-tech equipments. Besides, biodiversity also can contribute more on the way to save the mother Earth. Recent research did find out a new type of enzyme, which has the ability to dispose the agricultural sewage. And if just a small type of enzyme can help to solve one of the difficult parts of the climate-change problem, it is wondered that how many valuable things have been hidden.
Moreover, one of the problem also is worth considering is the fact that people have been damaging the natural by misusing it, and because of its invaluableness, it is requested to stop those bad behaviors. By raising fund, increasing the countries' awareness of how important nature is, also investing on saving-Earth projects and sharing the knowledge within the whole world are some suggested requirements to control the global warming phenomenon. If human and bio-system cannot work together, it can turn to be a serious disaster for the mother Earth's future life.

Peer Review of Mingzhu's WA1

At my first glance, the overal essay is coherent and fluent. After the general introduction about climate change, the thesis statement were stated clearly, which is about the role of developing and developed countries in the flight of climate change.
This essay is a point-to-point compare and contrast essay, and there are 3 main points: economic, political and environmental problems.
In the first paragraph, I think the thesis statement is quite confusing. Your paragraph said many things that the developed countries “have to” to do, but hardly something about the role of those developing ones. You can find some more examples that how those poor countries have done with the financial aid they receive in order to help reducing green-house gas emission.
In the second one, your example about Jet Li actions against the global warming is quite unsuitable, because it is more likely to be a social problems, not a political one.
The rest of the essay is almost prefect. You have included some statics, some number which can make your essay more persuadable.Just one thing that I would say that the Copenhagen climate change Conference was not successful at all, and its partial failure leads to the next conference in Mexico in 2010