Peer Review of Mingzhu's WA1

At my first glance, the overal essay is coherent and fluent. After the general introduction about climate change, the thesis statement were stated clearly, which is about the role of developing and developed countries in the flight of climate change.
This essay is a point-to-point compare and contrast essay, and there are 3 main points: economic, political and environmental problems.
In the first paragraph, I think the thesis statement is quite confusing. Your paragraph said many things that the developed countries “have to” to do, but hardly something about the role of those developing ones. You can find some more examples that how those poor countries have done with the financial aid they receive in order to help reducing green-house gas emission.
In the second one, your example about Jet Li actions against the global warming is quite unsuitable, because it is more likely to be a social problems, not a political one.
The rest of the essay is almost prefect. You have included some statics, some number which can make your essay more persuadable.Just one thing that I would say that the Copenhagen climate change Conference was not successful at all, and its partial failure leads to the next conference in Mexico in 2010